About the country I want to live in

I want to live in the country which is better than our country. It is because I can learn good things. For examples, She who was my teacher traveled in Europe. In that time, She found some convenient system. That was noticing system about bus time. So we can know where is the bus and how long take the bus to get here. After few year, she can see same system in korea. So I can expect to learn new thing and I will be able to learn new trand. It will be helpful about my future and my business.

Hi Ji [이름]! ^^, I enjoyed reading your composition because I like Europe too because just like what you've mentioned, it's a very organized country and rich too. There are a lot of opportunities there for foreigners. Your sentences are good but just be careful when to add 's' in your words. See you tomorrow! Don't eat a lot of chocolates. ^^, Teacher Carly I want to live in the country which is better than our country. >>CORRECTIt is because I can learn good things. >>CORRECTFor examples, She who was my teacher traveled in Europe. >> For example, my teacher before traveled in Europe.In that time, she found some convenient system. >>CORRECTThat was noticing system about bus time. >>CORRECTSo we can know where is the bus and how long take the bus to get here. >> So we would know where is the bus and how long will it take the bus to get here.After few year, she can see same system in korea. >> After a few years, she can see the same system in Korea.So I can expect to learn new thing and I will be able to learn new trand. >> So I can expect to learn new things and I will be able to learn new trend.It will be helpful about my future and my business. >>CORRECT