About the mobile telephones.
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes. Young people these days use cell phones too much. And I think we should ban cell phones in schools so that we can focus on school life.
강사 첨삭
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~ Teacher Tricia
Yes. Young people these days use cell phones too much.
>>> Yes. Young people, these days use cell phones too much.
And I think we should ban cell phones in schools so that we can focus on school life.
>>> CORRECT!
OR>>> And I think we should ban cell phones in schools so that we can focus on our studies.
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