About the reasons for violence before television and video games.
학생이 쓴 원문
I believe the cause of violence before television and video games was human jealousy and greed. All humans have desires. Because people are emotional, they can be sensitive to even the smallest things. I believe that human emotions are the main cause of violence. Television and video games simply encourage people to act on those feelings.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Sheila! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)
~ Teacher Tricia
I believe the cause of violence before television and video games was human jealousy and greed.
>>> CORRECT!
All humans have desires. Because people are emotional, they can be sensitive to even the smallest things.
>>> CORRECT!
I believe that human emotions are the main cause of violence.
>>> CORRECT!
Television and video games simply encourage people to act on those feelings.
>>> CORRECT!
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