About time and money

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Which do you like to have more money or to have more time?

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First, let\'s think about one thing.

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If I will have more money, what should I do first?

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I am going to travel all over the world for a long time.

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The place I would especially like to visit is the birthplace of ancient civilization such as Egypt, India and Peru.

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I have plan to write a book on the birthplace of ancient civilization.

>> I have a plan to write a book on the birthplace of ancient civilization.

 I have already visited China dozens of times.

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I plan to publish a book on the five mountains of Chinese within one year. And then I need time to write a book.

>> I plan to publish a book on the five mountains of China within one year but I need time to write a book.

Second, If I will have more time, what should I do?

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As I mentioned, I will write a book and read many books. I have too much books I have not read yet at my home.

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And, I want to hike various mountains.

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Now, let\'s think about it seriously, If I have more money, I will travel, If I also have more time, I will travel, too.

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Therefore, time and money are concepts that cannot be divided.

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There is a saying in the western proverb that time is money.

>> As one western proverb says, \"Time is gold\".