about war
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I hate the war. The war must not be happened any more.
War destroys many constructions and on top of that,kills a number of people every year. So I don't agree with cruelty.
I couldn't find positive thought.
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T. JanE ^^
I hate the war.
>> I hate war.
The war must not be happened any more.
>> War must not happen anymore.
War destroys many constructions and on top of that, kills a number of people every year.
>> Correct
So I don\'t agree with cruelty.
>> Correct
I couldn\'t find positive thought.
>> I couldn\'t find anything positive about it.
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