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link -> http://media.daum.net/society/education/newsview?newsid=20120622192711551 I live in Deagu. Before some years, some students who live in daegu used to commit suicide. Everytime when I read about these news, I'm very sad and too angry because of the reason what drive into suicide. Today, I read news that inform a solution of education office in-Daegu.That make me too angry and rage. They are going to built the fixing device at every school for prevent to suicide of students. It is too ignorant solution!! Many students who have many hurts and sad need and want real heart and sincere interest, not temporary solution which is meaninglessness. I really want that many students who need some help should be protected by fundamental solution.

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I live in Deagu.

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Before some years, some students who live in daegu used to commit suicide.

>>SOme years ago, some students who live in daegu used to commit suicide.

Everytime when I read about these news, I\'m very sad and too angry because of the reason what drive into suicide.
>>Everytime I read these news, I feel sad and angry knowing the reasons why they do this.

Today, I read news that inform a solution of education office in-Daegu.

>>Today I\'ve read a news about a solution of Education Office in Daegu.

That make me too angry and rage.

>>That made me really mad and furious.

They are going to built the fixing device at every school for prevent to suicide of students. 

>>They are going to build a device at every school to prevent suicide.

 It is too ignorant solution!!

>>It\'s an ignorant solution.

Many students who have many hurts and sad need and want real heart and sincere interest, not temporary solution which is meaninglessness.
>>many students were hurt and want to heal permanently.

I really want that many students who need some help should be protected by fundamental solution.

>>correct