According to the article, underage crimes began to grab the attention of the country\'s key authorit
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are many resources that children could refer to, which made them learn crime methods and idolize adult criminals. Not to mention news resources, there are various non-fictional ones, such as dramas and webtoons, which are very approachable for many young generations. Korea has an age limit regarding violent and suggestive films. However, there are not enough tools to block the young generation from watching illegal websites to short-form videos on Youtube and TikTok. Also, the lack of an educational framework could be another reason. Korea abolished corporal punishment. It was favorable from the human rights perspective because those punishments were very abusive and humiliating. But, it became challenging for teachers to control students’ behavior from the accusations directly escalated to the Ministry of Education. Accordingly, many teachers became cautious of any physical interaction, and students disregarded any advice from teachers.
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Thank you for this once again Aciel. Keep them coming. :D
There are many resources that children could refer to, which made them learn crime methods and idolize adult criminals.
There are many resources that children could refer to, which made them learn crime methods and idolize adult criminals.
>>> correct
Not to mention news resources, there are various non-fictional ones, such as dramas and webtoons, which are very approachable for many young generations.
>>> OR: Not to mention news resources, there are various non-fictional ones, such as dramas and webtoons, which are very accessible for many young generations.
Korea has an age limit regarding violent and suggestive films.
>>> correct
However, there are not enough tools to block the young generation from watching illegal websites to short-form videos on Youtube and TikTok.
>>> correct
Also, the lack of an educational framework could be another reason.
>>> correct
Korea abolished corporal punishment.
>>> correct
It was favorable from the human rights perspective because those punishments were very abusive and humiliating.
>>> correct
But, it became challenging for teachers to control students’ behavior from the accusations directly escalated to the Ministry of Education.
>>> correct
Accordingly, many teachers became cautious of any physical interaction, and students disregarded any advice from teachers.
>>> correct
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