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2021-06-09 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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Once I have tried the mountain climbing and skiing, but I have failed them because I got the wreak muscle of legs and arm. So, I have never retried the exercises above two items. Therefore, now I am learning Dan Sports two times a week and walking around my hose and near the hill every morning about two hours.

강사 첨삭

Hi Mr. [이름]!
Let\'s focus on organization of thoughts.
The sentences should flow more smoothly.
This can be achieved through constant practice.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Once I have tried the mountain climbing and skiing, but I have failed them
>> Once, I did try mountain climbing and skiing but I have failed in them.
because I got the wreak muscle of legs and arm. 
>> It\'s because I had weak leg and arm muscles.
So, I have never retried the exercises above two items. 
>> So, I have never done those activities again.
Therefore, now I am learning Dan Sports two times a week and walking around my hose and near the hill every morning about two hours.
>> Now, I\'m learning dance sport twice a week and walking around my house and near a hill every morning for about two hours.  

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