adding to my conversion
학생이 쓴 원문
While I talked to you, I thought that you might not understand the unique culture of our team. As i said, our team had a get-together yesterday. It was a meeting for congratulating for the promotion of my two subordinates. As a team manager, i would like to have our team's unique culture in a ger-together. The culture is that we pour beer and Soju in a big bowl and our 7 members drain it to the bottom in order. I drink as much as I could and then pass it the next people. All 7 peple participate inceremony. Of course, hard drinker drinks much more than the weak drinker.
Maybe, It sounds a little bit stupid to you.
강사 첨삭
Hey there Sir [이름]! How\'s it goin\'? Don\'t worry, I understood what you were telling me earlier. ^^ I don\'t think it\'s stupid. It actually sounds like fun! I enjoy drinking games with some of my friends too. I think having that sort of culture within your team will make you a solid and strong team. Keep it up!
Take care and enjoy the weekend! CIAO!
~Teacher Marie~
adding to my conversion
>> In addition to our conversation...
Or >> In addition to what I was talking about during our conversation...
While I talked to you, I thought that you might not understand the unique culture of our team.
>> correct
As i said, our team had a get-together yesterday.
>> As I said, our team had a get-together yesterday.
It was a meeting for congratulating for the promotion of my two subordinates.
>> It was a meeting to congratulate the promotion of my two subordinates.
As a team manager, i would like to have our team\'s unique culture in a ger-together. >> As the team manager, I would like to have a unique culture during get-togethers with my team.
The culture is that we pour beer and Soju in a big bowl and our 7 members drain it to the bottom in order.
>> The culture goes like this: we will pour beer and soju in a big bowl and all 7 members will drain it in order.
I drink as much as I could and then pass it the next people.
>> I drink as much as I could and then pass it over to the people next to me.
All 7 peple participate inceremony.
>> All seven of us participate in this ceremony.
Of course, hard drinker drinks much more than the weak drinker. >> Of course the hardcore drinker drinks much more than the light drinker.Maybe, It sounds a little bit stupid to you.
>> Maybe it sounds a little bit stupid to you.
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