additional part
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Most of all, this packaging offers very simple and convenience experiences for the consumers have some cheese with bread. This packaging has a protrusion which could be a butter knife. When consumer squeeze with this packaging, Right this protrusion helps the consumers can spread cream cheese at same time. It could be very useful things for some so busy and crowded restaurants such fast-food, cafeteria, or coffee shop. Moreover, consumers are able to open the top cover. From this part, consumers also can enjoy the cheese inside with dipping some kinds of crackers.
The bottom part which is transparency PET material should be soft enough as much as people squeeze. The main outlet which is located on bottom side is over 3mm. this is important that the cover which is covering the main outlet would keep clean until the consumer take off it.
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Hello Taylor! I am sorry..It took me a long time to give the correction. Anyway, here it is. I think it is better to simplify the sentences so that they can be easily understood. It sounds great..I hope you do win..Good Luck!
T. Jennifer
Most of all, this packaging offers very simple and convenience experiences for the consumers have some cheese with bread.
>>Best of all, this packaging offers simplicity and convenience that can make consumers\' experience with cheese better.
This packaging has a protrusion which could be a butter knife.
>> This packaging has a protrusion which could function as a butter knife.
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