admired person.
학생이 쓴 원문
My former vice branch manager, Mr. [Name] is the one I most admire.
I have learned many things from him.
He is always based on data made a decision. He was very logical person with clear goals.
Even though he also made a wrong decision occasionally, but the process that he made decision, made people understand why he made that decision.
Moreover, he is good at communicate with team member. Through the communication he got new idea from team member, and it was the key of successful achievement of the branch.
He is my role model, and I tried to resemble him. And my working style is affected by him a lot.
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름]!^^
It\'s my pleasure to check your composition and help you with your grammar. I\'m happy I could help!^_^
My former vice branch manager, Mr. [Name] is the one I most admire.
>>> Mr. [Name] was my former vice branch manager and he\'s a person I admire the most.
I have learned many things from him.
I have learned many things from him.
>>> CORRECT!
OR>>>I learned a lot of things from him.
He is always based on data made a decision.
He is always based on data made a decision.
>>> He always based his decisions on data.
He was very logical person with clear goals.
>>>He was a very logical person with clear goals.
Even though he also made a wrong decision occasionally, but the process that he made decision, made people understand why he made that decision.
Even though he also made a wrong decision occasionally, but the process that he made decision, made people understand why he made that decision.
>>> Even though he also made wrong decisions occasionally, the process of his decisions made people understand why he did those decisions.
Moreover, he is good at communicate with team member.
Moreover, he is good at communicate with team member.
>>> Moreover, he was good at communicating with his team members.
Through the communication he got new idea from team member, and it was the key of successful achievement of the branch.
>>> Through communication, he got new ideas from his team members and it was the key to successful achievements in the branch.
He is my role model and I tried to resemble him. And my working style is affected by him a lot.
He is my role model and I tried to resemble him. And my working style is affected by him a lot.
>>> He is my role model. I try to resemble him and he influenced my working style a lot.
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