Advantage and disadvantage of technology

2015-12-24 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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Technologies are being developed rapidly nowadays, and though there are many good aspects, we should also note that there are several disadvantages. The benefit of technology is that we can live wealthier and more convenient lives. For example, before 18th century, people could make only a limited number of products. However, after steam engine was invented, a lot of goods could be produced quickly and could therefore make people's lives more convenient. The disadvantage of techonology is that there are harms to the environment. Supporter of further development of technology might argue that eco-friendly technologies will be developed. But the main purpose of technology is to make our lives convenient; to make things progress faster. Mostly, during that process, polllution occurs, devastating the nature. Therefore, when developing technology, we should always consider these two different faces of technology.

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Hi [이름]! Happy Holidays!!!   Thank you so much for this composition. You really has a talent in writing essays plus you know how to elaborate your ideas in order to support your point of views. I hope you will continuously sharpen this skills for it will be very favorable to you in the future. I\'ll see you in class and that will be on Tuesday next week. Keep yourself warm this winter!^^   ~T. Mayleen~     Technologies are being developed rapidly nowadays, and though there are many good aspects, we should also note that there are several disadvantages. >> CORRECT OR: Technologies are being developed rapidly nowadays and we have to consider not only the advantages but also the disadvantages. The benefit of technology is that we can live wealthier and more convenient lives. >> The benefit of technology is that we live more conveniently now than before. For example, before 18th century, people could make only a limited number of products. >> CORRECT OR: For example, before 18th century, production of goods was manually done so products were limited. However, after steam engine was invented, a lot of goods could be produced quickly and could therefore make people\'s lives more convenient. >> However, after the steam engine was invented, mass production was made possible therefore making people\'s lives more convenient.The disadvantage of techonology is that there are harms to the environment. >> The disadvantage of technology is that it causes harm to the environment. Supporter of further development of technology might argue that eco-friendly technologies will be developed. >> CORRECT But the main purpose of technology is to make our lives convenient; to make things progress faster. >> CORRECT Mostly, during that process, polllution occurs, devastating the nature. >> CORRECT OR: During the process, pollution occurs destroying our natural environment.Therefore, when developing technology, we should always consider these two different faces of technology. >> Therefore, when developing technology, we should always consider it\'s good and bad effects whether to man or to nature.

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