Advantages and disadvantages of tourism
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What is the meaning of tourism? Why do people travel? Is it curisoty about new things? And is it to resolve the intellectual curisoty? Is it to meet a lot of people?
The purpose of travel is various. The purpose of individual is various, too. Travel grows the perspective of individual. Travel is not narrow-minded person's knowledge. People met lots of another people while they traveled. Therefore, travel gives us a worthy and improving pleasure. And travel helps you meet different people and widen your vision. But it is important to balance for body and mind. To keep a balance for body and mind should be not only travel but also read. Travel is dynamic, read is statics. To travel except read a book is to only money can consume. So people went with a book when people left a travel.
강사 첨삭
Hello sir,
I think everybody would like to travel somewhere if given the chance and money. But you are right travelling through reading is cheap and it can take you to a lot of far away places. Seeing the real thing though is the best. See you later sir!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
What is the meaning of tourism? Why do people travel? Is it curisoty about new things? And is it to resolve the intellectual curisoty? Is it to meet a lot of people?
>>correct!The purpose of travel is various.
>>The purpose of traveling is varied.
OR>> There are various reasons why people travel.
The purpose of individual is various, too.
>>The purpose of each individual is various too.
Travel grows the perspective of individual.
>>correct!
Travel is not narrow-minded person\'s knowledge.
>>correct!
People met lots of another people while they traveled.
>>People met lots of other people while they travel.
Therefore, travel gives us a worthy and improving pleasure.
>>correct!
And travel helps you meet different people and widen your vision.
>>correct!
But it is important to balance for body and mind.
>>correct!
To keep a balance for body and mind should be not only travel but also read.
>>To keep a balance of the body and mind, we should not only travel but we should also read.
Travel is dynamic, read is statics.
>>Travelling is dynamic, reading is statistics.
To travel except read a book is to only money can consume.
>>To travel unlike reading consume a lot of money.
So people went with a book when people left a travel.
>>So some people travel with a book while others go on a trip.
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