Advantages and disadvantages of tourism

2016-07-15 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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What is the meaning of tourism? Why do people travel? Is it curisoty about new things? And is it to resolve the intellectual curisoty? Is it to meet a lot of people? The purpose of travel is various. The purpose of individual is various, too. Travel grows the perspective of individual. Travel is not narrow-minded person's knowledge. People met lots of another people while they traveled. Therefore, travel gives us a worthy and improving pleasure. And travel helps you meet different people and widen your vision. But it is important to balance for body and mind. To keep a balance for body and mind should be not only travel but also read. Travel is dynamic, read is statics. To travel except read a book is to only money can consume. So people went with a book when people left a travel.

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Hello sir, I think everybody would like to travel somewhere if given the chance and money. But you are right travelling through reading is cheap and it can take you to a lot of far away places. Seeing the real thing though is the best. See you later sir! Take care! ~T. Lynn   What is the meaning of tourism? Why do people travel? Is it curisoty about new things? And is it to resolve the intellectual curisoty? Is it to meet a lot of people? >>correct!The purpose of travel is various. >>The purpose of traveling is varied. OR>> There are various reasons why people travel. The purpose of individual is various, too. >>The purpose of each individual is various too. Travel grows the perspective of individual. >>correct! Travel is not narrow-minded person\'s knowledge. >>correct! People met lots of another people while they traveled. >>People met lots of other people while they travel. Therefore, travel gives us a worthy and improving pleasure. >>correct! And travel helps you meet different people and widen your vision. >>correct! But it is important to balance for body and mind. >>correct! To keep a balance for body and mind should be not only travel but also read. >>To keep a balance of the body and mind, we should not only travel but we should also read. Travel is dynamic, read is statics. >>Travelling is dynamic, reading is statistics. To travel except read a book is to only money can consume. >>To travel unlike reading consume a lot of money. So people went with a book when people left a travel. >>So some people travel with a book while others go on a trip.

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