Adventure

I want to climb Mt.Everest.It would be scary but I want to watch the real Mt.Everst not in a book.Because, in a book there are only picture there so, it was not interesting.And I want to show off that I climbed the Mt.Everst.But I hate walking or climbing a lot.So, I can't to go Mt.Everest.I want to travel around the world. I want to watch Bayern Munich soccer game real in Europe.And I want to buy a fresh salmon in Norway. Also,I want to watch Belgium's landscape. I will visit Hollywood and go to the NewYork and I will see a beautiful Canada's landscape and buy maple syrup. I will visit Australia and see kangaroo.

Hi [이름]! Thank you for preparing your homework. I really appreciate the effort that you exerted to comeup with an interesting essay. Great ideas! I can feel your excitement in exploring the world.  Who knows, all of these will come true. You just have to wait for the right time for you to see these wonderful places that you mentioned. Everything is possible! Anyway, here are the corrections I\'ve made for your essay.   Just keep on practicing and learning English especially vocabulary.  You were able to express yourself well and the ideas are really fantastic. Great job!   - Teacher Kris   I want to climb Mt.Everest. >> correct It would be scary but I want to watch the real Mt.Everst not in a book. >>It  would be scary but I want to see the real Mt. Everest not just in a book. Because, in a book there are only picture there so, it was not interesting. >>In a book, there are only pictures given so it is not interesting.  And I want to show off that I climbed the Mt.Everst >>I also want to show off to my friends  that I am able to climb Mt. Everest. But I hate walking or climbing a lot. So, I can\'t to go Mt.Everest. >>However, I hate walking and climbing so I won\'t go to Mt. Everest. I want to travel around the world. >>correct   I want to watch Bayern Munich soccer game real in Europe. >>  I want to watch  Bayern Munich soccer game in Europe And I want to buy a fresh salmon in Norway. >>correct Also,I want to watch Belgium\'s landscape. >>I want to see Belgium\'s landscape .  I will visit Hollywood and go to the NewYork and I will see a beautiful Canada\'s landscape and buy maple syrup. >> I will also visit Hollywood and New York. I will see  the  beautiful Canada\'s landscape and buy maple syrup.  I will visit Australia and see kangaroo. >>Lastly,I will visit Australia to see kangaroos.