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2020-05-18 · 첨삭 강사 Jasper

학생이 쓴 원문

Come to think of it, there was a trivial thing You play the game too long, you can grow up with balanced nutrition Go to bed early...... It`s like nagging at something that doesn`t really matter. Most parents want their children to be perfect, I hope they don`t make a mistakes like me, But there is more to learn by making mistakes. I think they wait as long as they love them. The best advice is to endure and wait for a long time with a warm gaze .

강사 첨삭

Hi Mrs. [Name]. Happy Monday. Thank you for doing your homework Keep up the good work. You did marvelous. See you later!
- T. Jasper

Here are your corrections:

Come to think of it, there was a trivial thing
>> CORRECT

You play the game too long, you can grow up with balanced nutrition
Go to bed early......
>> I told them, \" You\'re playing the game too much.\", \"You should eat nutritious food to grow up.\", or \"Go to bed early\".

It`s like nagging at something that doesn`t really matter.
>> It sounds like I am nagging for something that doesn\'t matter.

Most parents want their children to be perfect,
>> Most of the parents just want their children to be perfect. 

I hope they don`t make a mistakes like me,
>> I am hoping that they don\'t make the same mistakes I did.

But there is more to learn by making mistakes.
>> But, there is more to learn from making mistakes.

I think they wait as long as they love them.
>> I think they can wait as long as they love them.

The best advice is to endure and wait for a long time with a warm gaze
>> The best piece of advice is to endure and wait for a long time with a warm gaze.

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