Affect bad effect to penguins
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I think global warming affect lots of bad effects. Global warming makes the ice in north, and south poles melt. Penguins live on the ice land. But if the ice lands melt, then penguins lose their home. It makes penguins die. So global warming affects very bad effects to penguins.
(From now on, I\'ll write about scientific facts.)
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Hello, Daniel! You did an amazing job. Your reply is the
perfect answer to the given question. I agree with what you wrote. You should only look for scientific facts. However, make sure you get your information from reliable websites. Alright?
- Teacher Debbie
>> I think global warming has lots of bad effects.
Global warming makes the ice in north, and south poles melt.
>> It makes the ice in the north and south poles melt.
Penguins live on the ice land.
>> Penguins live on icy land.
But if the ice lands melt, then penguins lose their home.
>> However, if the ice melts, the penguins will lose their home.
It makes penguins die.
>> Penguins can die.
So global warming affects very bad effects to penguins.
>> Therefore, global warming has bad effects to penguins.
(From now on, I\'ll write about scientific facts.)
>> This is a good sentence.
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