After life
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello sir!
An excellent composition sir as usual. I too believe in the after life but I want to know what exactly happens after we die. Do you have any idea sir? See you later.
Take care!
~T. Lynn
All man is mortal. If people was dead, where shall we go? That is exactly after life.
>>All men are mortal. When we die, where will we go? That is the after life.
After life is connected with religion.
>>correct!
All religion says the existence of after life.
>>All religions believe in the existence of the after life.
The after life is reason for the existence of a religion.
>>The after life is the reason of the existence of religion.
I believed in after life, too.
>>correct!
After life is heaven and hell, paradise and so on.
>>correct!
If I would die, where do I want to go? Of course I will want to go to heaven.
>>correct!
How can I go to heaven? All religion says that you may be reborn as a human by good deeds.
>>How can I go to heaven? All religion say that you may be reborn as a human by doing good deeds.
This is the reason why religion is not only positive effect on human but also social positive effect.
>>This is the reason why religion does not only have positive effect on humans but also on society.
But after life exist still before religion take place in world.
>>But after life existed even before religion was created in the world.
It was a primitive kind.
>>correct!
In ancient society, people performs ancestral rites for a spritual and ghosts.
>>In ancient society, people performed ancestral rites for spirits and ghosts.
As we have a our spritual, as we have a after life.
>>As we have spirits so we have after life.
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