After the Covid 19

2020-09-25 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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After the Covid19, the world will be changed in many ways. First of all, I think telecommuting will become common. Many workers related IT companies will no longer have to go to work everyday and this type of work(telecommuting) will affect the housing. People don\'t have to live in the city near the company anymore. They don\'t need to pay the expensive city\'s lent fee for easy commuting and they will prefer to single houses rather than apartments where many people live to avoid another virus. Also, I think non-face-to-face services will be activated in all systems. Most of the work will be done by just computer at home, as a result a lot of jobs could disappear. At the same time, as people\'s free time will increase, so that, jobs related hobbies and leisure could increase.

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Thanks Ms. [이름] [이름]!
~Lucy
After the Covid19, the world will be changed in many ways.
>>CORRECT!
First of all, I think telecommuting will become common.
>>CORRECT!
Many workers related IT companies will no longer have to go to work everyday and this type of work(telecommuting) will affect the housing.
>>Many workers related with IT companies will no longer have to go to work everyday and this type of work(telecommuting) will affect the housing.
People don\'t have to live in the city near the company anymore. 
>>CORRECT!
They don\'t need to pay the expensive city\'s lent fee for easy commuting and they will prefer to single houses rather than apartments where many people live to avoid another virus.
>>They don\'t need to pay the expensive city\'s lent fee for easy commuting and they will prefer to stay in single houses rather than apartments where many people live to avoid another virus.
Also, I think non-face-to-face services will be activated in all systems.
>>CORRECT!
 Most of the work will be done by just computer at home, as a result a lot of jobs could disappear. 
>>CORRECT!
At the same time, as people\'s free time will increase, so that, jobs related hobbies and leisure could increase.
>>At the same time, as people\'s free time will increase, so that, jobs related with hobbies and leisure could be increased.


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