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I believe that there are a few advantages of getting old. First of all, people can experience and learn more various things as they grow older. Wisdom of life is the only thing that people cannot buy using money. I would say that not only knowledge but also street smarts are the most important things in making a living. Secondly, most people make a family when they get older. I think it is a valuable experience that only older people can experience to get married and make a family. In addition, I think that the reason why people now try to live life to the full and work hard is for preparing their old age. This means if they expect their old age, they can live harder with motivation. That is, looking forward to old age can bring vitality to their lives. To sum up, I would say there are many upsides of getting old in that people can build various experiences and make a family as they grow old.
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- T. Beth
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I believe that there are a few advantages of getting old. >>> correct
First of all, people can experience and learn more various things as they grow older.
>>> correct
Wisdom of life is the only thing that people cannot buy using money.
>>> correct
I would say that not only knowledge but also street smarts are the most important things in making a living.
>>> OR: I would say that not only knowledge but also being street smart are the most important things in making a living.
Secondly, most people make a family when they get older.
>>> correct
I think it is a valuable experience that only older people can experience to get married and make a family.
>>> correct
In addition, I think that the reason why people now try to live life to the full and work hard is for preparing their old age.
>>> OR: In addition, I think that the reason why people now try to live life to the fullest and work hard is to prepare for their old age.
This means if they expect their old age, they can live harder with motivation.
>>> correct
That is, looking forward to old age can bring vitality to their lives.
>>> correct
To sum up, I would say there are many upsides of getting old in that people can build various experiences and make a family as they grow old.
>>> correct
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