aging population

2020-05-01 · 첨삭 강사 Jasper

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First of all, the people that is can work getting reduce. It is a burden to the younger generation and government. Advance in medical technology will inevitably increase the number of senior citizens. I think that it needs to work for them. I hope that people in twilight are happy.

강사 첨삭

Hi Mrs. [Name]~
Thank you for doing your homework. You did great. Keep it up. - T. Jasper

Here are your corrections:

First of all, the people that is can work getting reduce.

>> First of all, the people that can work will be reduced.

It is a burden to the younger generation and government.

>> It is a burden to the younger generation and the government.

Advance in medical technology will inevitably increase the number of senior citizens.

>> Advancement in medical technology will inevitably increase the number of senior citizens.

I think that it needs to work for them.

>> CORRECT

I hope that people in twilight are happy.

>> CORRECT

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