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2013-02-18 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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"The only thing that makes the world a better place is LOVE." I agree with the idea that love can make the world a better place. We, as a human being, are not perfect. We sometimes make mistakes, get disappointed and frusrated. In such a case, the most powerful tool or means to overcome the difficulties is love. All we need is love. This is right. love is all we need. If we truly loved one another and our neighbor as ourself, we wouldn't want them to be hungry or homeless, to be taken advantage of in the labor market , or to enter into conflict against them. To love means sacrificing some of what we personally get, have or do, so that our beloved has some of what they need. This is the way we can make the world a better place to live.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!! How was your weekend? I hope you had fun.^^

By the way, thank you for sending this to me. I appreciate your effort in answering your homework.

Anyway, please review the corrections that I\'ve made.

Keep up the great work!

See you in class!

Have a wonderful Monday.

~Teacher Kate~

\"The only thing that makes the world a better place is LOVE.\"

I agree with the idea that love can make the world a better place.

>>Correct!!

We, as a human being, are not perfect. We sometimes make mistakes, get disappointed and frusrated.

>>We, as a human beings are not perfect. We sometimes make mistakes, get disappointed and frustrated.

In such a case, the most powerful tool or means to overcome the difficulties is love.

>>In such cases, the most powerful tool to overcome difficulties is love.

All we need is love.This is right. love is all we need.

>>Correct!![capitalization^^]

If we truly loved one another and our neighbor as ourself, we wouldn\'t want them to be hungry or homeless, to be taken advantage of in the labor market , or to enter into conflict against them.

>>If we truly love one another and our neighbors, we don\'t want them to be hungry or homeless, to take advantage of them in the labor market.

To love means sacrificing some of what we personally get, have or do, so that our beloved has some of what they need.

>>To love means sacrificing some of what we personally get, what we\'ve got or do so our loved ones will have what they need.

This is the way we can make the world a better place to live.

>>This is the way to make the world a better place to live in.

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