Air Rocket

2017-04-11 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

학생이 쓴 원문

I have to make air rocket but I went to home because of this class.I went home but the computer was not turned on.So,I called my mom for 12times but my mom didn't responded.And 13times she responded.And she tell the computer code.I was really angry.And today I was sleepy too.The rocket contest is this Saturday.So,I have to practice with my partner today.But I can go now.I have a class at 7 and after this class is at 5:35.And it takes 35minutes to go his house.When I go to his house I can stay at home for 30minutes.So,I can't go.And during the Power English class the computer was turned off.I want to say it is not my fault.The computer was turned off suddenly.I don't do that on purpose.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! 


I understand how you feel about what happened.

It would be better to postpone the class an hour before or better yet earlier than that.

Somehow I felt bad about what happened.

Maybe you can tell your mom what your activities will be.

Good luck with your rocket contest and your upcoming test.


_Teacher Dianne ^^


I have to make air rocket but I went to home because of this class.

>> I have to make an air rocket, but I went home because of this class.

I went home but the computer was not turned on.

>> I went home, but the computer was not turned on.

So,I called my mom for 12times but my mom didn\'t responded.And 13times she responded.

>> So I called my mom about 12 times, but my mom didn\'t respond and she only answered my call on the 13th time.

And she tell the computer code.

>> She then told me the computer code.

I was really angry.

>> correct

And today I was sleepy too.

>> correct

The rocket contest is this Saturday.

>> correct

>> or: The rocket contest will be on Saturday.

So, I have to practice with my partner today.

>> correct

But I can go now.

>> But I can\'t go now.

I have a class at 7 and after this class is at 5:35.And it takes 35minutes to go his house.

>> I have a class at 7 pm and I usually finish this class at 5:35 pm. It takes 35 minutes to go to his house.

When I go to his house I can stay at home for 30minutes.So,I can\'t go.

>> When I go to his house, I can only stay there for 30 minutes, so I can\'t go now.

And during the Power English class the computer was turned off.I want to say it is not my fault.The computer was turned off suddenly.I don\'t do that on purpose.

>> And during our class, the computer suddenly turned off and I want to say that it\'s not my fault. The computer turned off suddenly and I didn\'t do it on purpose.

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