Alcohol drinks and microorganism

2012-03-09 · 첨삭 강사 Nica

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Most of people are not unaware of the process through which such beverages are produced while enjoying beer, wine and other alcoholic drinks. Central to it is the mixing of sugar and yeast together. When that happens the microorganisms in the yest basically eat the sugar to survive.Through this process known as fermentation, the yeast convert the sugar into alcohol, which is basically a waste poduct. Ironically, the microorganisms eventually kil themselves off by filling their enviroment with toxic levels of alchohol. Sugar and yeast therefore the vital ingredients of alcoholic drinks. The old town of Machu Picchu was discovered in 1911 and is now Peru's the most famous attraction. Unfortunately that has caused promblems because now it is receiving perhaps too much attraction. During the making of a beer commercial last year,a cameraman fell into the sacred sundial, snapping off a small part of the device.Then a Japanese scientist insisted tha Machu Picchu's foundation were crumbling.

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Hi Sophia!^^ Thank you for your composition. I provided you some corrections. Please find time to review it. See you in class. Take care!^^ __Teacher Nica__   Most of people are not unaware of the process through which such beverages are produced while enjoying beer, wine and other alcoholic drinks. >> Correct! Central to it is the mixing of sugar and yeast together. >> The main process for it is the mixing of the sugar and yeast together. When that happens the microorganisms in the yest basically eat the sugar to survive. >> On that process the microorganisms on the yeast will eat the sugarto survive. Through this process known as fermentation, the yeast convert the sugar into alcohol, which is basically a waste poduct. >> In the process known as fermentation, the yeast converts the sugar into alcohol which is a waste of product. Ironically, the microorganisms eventually kill themselves off by filling their enviroment with toxic levels of alchohol. >> Correct! Sugar and yeast therefore the vital ingredients of alcoholic drinks. >> Therefore, sugarand yeast are the main ingredients of alcoholic drinks. The old town of Machu Picchu was discovered in 1911 and is now Peru\'s the most famous attraction. >> The old town of Machu Picchu was discovered in 1911 and is now Peru\'s most famous attraction. Unfortunately that has caused problems because now it is receiving perhaps too much attraction. >> Correct! During the making of a beer commercial last year,a cameraman fell into the sacred sundial, snapping off a small part of the device. >> Correct! Then a Japanese scientist insisted that Machu Picchu\'s foundation were crumbling. >> Correct!

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