Alcohol should be illegal.

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Most Korean love drinking alcohol after work.

>> Most Koreans love drinking alcohol after work.

I used to drink alcohol with my colleague or close friend whenever I have a good news or bad things to me.

>> I used to drink with my colleagues or close friends whenever I have a good news or bad things to tell them.

>> OR: I used to drink with my colleagues or close friends whenever I have a good or bad news to tell them.

It makes me relax and is the way to relieve stress.
>> It makes me relax and is my way to relieve stress.

>> OR: It makes me relax and is a way to relieve stress.

So I do not agree that alcohol should be illegal.
>> Therefore, I don\'t agree that alcohol should be illegal.

I am not sure if I can manage my life well without alcohol.

>> CORRECT!

i know alcohol can cause a lot of crime like drunken driving,murder, or sexual abuse.

>> I know alcohol can cause a lot of crimes like drunk driving, murder, or sexual abuse.

People must know that how much alcohol they can drink and try not to over drinking.

>> People must know that they can drink much alcohol as long as they try not to over drink.

>> OR: People must know that they can drink much alcohol as long as they try not to get drunk and be wasted.

If someone is alcoholic, he or she have to get consultation from professional doctor.

>> If someone is alcoholic, he or she has to get consultations from a professional doctor.