Aling with God
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
It was the wonderful this year movie I ever seen.
>> It was the most wonderful movie I\'ve seen this year.
The story was really fantastic.
>>Correct
The story background was about oriental thinking.
>> The background story is about oriental thinking.
When someone die oriental people think there is another world.
>>When someone dies, oriental people think that there is another world.
Along with God 1 the firefighter alives and along with God 2 firefighter brother came to the new world.
>> In \'Along with the Gods 1\', the firefighter lived and in \'Along with the Gods 2\', the firefighter\'s brother came to the new world.
And the trial of his unfortuantely death was start.
>> And the trial of the his unfortunate death started.
Yeonra King said to 3guardinas bring Ma Dong Seok to him.
>> King Yeonra told the three guardians bring Ma Dong Seok to him.
Garlim and a girl met Ma Dong Seok. And he told a story to Garlim and a girl.
>> When Garlim and the girl met Ma Dong Seok, he told them about their past story/life.
Actually Garlim was a Koreyo soldier 1000years ago.And a girl was take care of children 1000years ago.
>> Actually Garlim was a Goryeo soldier while the girl took care of children and Ha Gyeong Wo was a Goryeo general from 1000 years ago.
Ha geyong wo and garlim was a brother.
>> Ha Gyeong Wo and Garlim were brothers.
But Ha Gyeong Wo killed Garlim and a girl killed Ha Gyeong Wo and Ha Gyeong Wo killed a girl.
>> But Ha Gyeong Wo killed Garlim and the girl tried to kill Ha Gyeong Wo but Ha Gyeong Wo killed the girl.
And Yeonra give a chance to work with them to Ha Gyeong Wo to forgive their death.
>> King Yeonra gave them a chance to work with Ha Gyeong Wo to forgive him of their death.
Finally the soldier\'s death was revealed it was unfortuantely death.And soldier was alive.
>> Finally, the unfortunate death of the soldier was revealed and the soldier lived.
And soldier who accidently killed alived soldier came to a hall.
>> The soldier who was accidentally killed, lived and came to the hall.
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