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Cats and dogs are the most common types of pets. What are some unusual or exotic pets that you have heard of?
>>> I actually had raised hermit crab when I was 7 years old for two years. Their names are ox and cow because that time was a period where I started to study English hard and ox and cow are what I first learned at that time. When I put them on my hand, I could feel their legs and movements vividly. But because I was too young to raise living things, finally they went.
I also had raised chick for only three days. I bought and brought it from chick seller in front of my elementary school entrance. After school, when I saw them on the way back home, I couldn\'t tear my eyes from chicks in box because they are so cute. I couldn\'t help buying it immediately. But unfortunately, It went because it dived into water that I gave for quench its thirst. I remember that after buring it, my mom gave me a chocolate to console me.
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Cats and dogs are the most common types of pets. What are some unusual or exotic pets that you have heard of?
>>> I actually had raised hermit crab when I was 7 years old for two years.
>>> I actually had raised hermit crab when I was 7 years old for two years.
>> I actually had raised a hermit crab when I was 7 years old for two years.
Their names are ox and cow because that time was a period where I started to study English hard and ox and cow are what I first learned at that time.
>> CORRECT!When I put them on my hand, I could feel their legs and movements vividly.
>> CORRECT!But because I was too young to raise living things, finally they went.
>> CORRECT!
>> CORRECT!
I also had raised chick for only three days.
>> I also had raised a chick for only three days.
I bought and brought it from chick seller in front of my elementary school entrance.
>> CORRECT!
After school, when I saw them on the way back home, I couldn\'t tear my eyes from chicks in box because they are so cute.
>> After school, when I saw them on the way back home, I couldn\'t tear my eyes from chicks in the box because they are so cute.
I couldn\'t help buying it immediately.
>> CORRECT!
But unfortunately, It went because it dived into water that I gave for quench its thirst.
>> But unfortunately, it went because it dived into the water that I gave to quench its thirst.
I remember that after buring it, my mom gave me a chocolate to console me.
>> I remember that after burying it, my mom gave me a chocolate to console me.
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