allery

2021-05-18 · 첨삭 강사 Donna

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I don\"t have allery but If I have it i will do this things. First, I will eat a medicine and rest. Also i will cool down my body. So I can feel normal. because of coolin down my body. Second, If allery is to serious i will visit to a doctor. So my dotcor can fix my problems. And also take more medicine for a doctor. That\'s the thins that i will do if I have allergys

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]!

I think that you have a brilliant plan to solve your allergy. You are right about consulting a doctor immediately because some allergies can be fatal and can lead to death.

You wrote a very good essay. Below are a few missing words and some grammar points you can improve on your writing. I must say that you have a very clear thinking and concrete solutions. Keep up the good work. I hope to see you again in class.

Study hard! See you!

-T. Donna =)

I don\"t have allery but If I have it i will do this things.
>> I don\'t have allergy but If I have it I will do these things.

First, I will eat a medicine and rest. 
>> First, I will take in medicine and rest. 

Also i will cool down my body. So I can feel normal. because of coolin down my body.
>> Also I will cool down my body so I can feel normal. 

Second, If allery is to serious i will visit to a doctor. 
>> Second, if my allergy is to serious, I will visit a doctor. 

So my dotcor can fix my problems. 
>> Correct!

And also take more medicine for a doctor.
>> And also, the doctor can prescribe more medicine.

That\'s the thins that i will do if I have allergys
>> Those are the things that I will do if I have allergies.

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