alternatives of zoos
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Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?
Zoos are usually used for educational purposes because people can see lions, elephants, and monkeys that are commonly encountered on TV or in books. They become familiar with stranger animals through touching and feeding activities.
However, many people believe that zoos should be closed because of animal abuse, which is breeding animals in narrow cages. Also, the animal has emotions, so the animal of zoos often behave abnormally under huge stress.
Therefore, we should make alternatives to zoos. the zoos have to break narrow cages and make huge cages which animals can run and play themselves. And we should watch them far away so that they don\'t get stress.
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Happy Friday sir Andy! It\'s nice to hear what your opinion will be regarding this topics. ^_^
T. Irene
Zoos are usually used for educational purposes because people can see lions, elephants, and monkeys that are commonly encountered on TV or in books.
>>> Zoos are usually used for educational purposes because people can see the animals such as lions, elephants, and monkeys that are commonly encountered only on TV or in books.
They become familiar with stranger animals through touching and feeding activities.
>>> They become familiar with the animals through touch and feeding activities.
However, many people believe that zoos should be closed because of animal abuse, which is breeding animals in narrow cages.
However, many people believe that zoos should be closed because of animal abuse, which is breeding animals in narrow cages.
>>> However, many people believe that zoos should be closed because of animal abuse like breeding animals in narrow cages.
Also, the animal has emotions, so the animal of zoos often behave abnormally under huge stress.
>>> Also, it is believed that the animal has emotions, so the animals in the zoos often behave abnormally under a lot of stress.
Therefore, we should make alternatives to zoos.
Therefore, we should make alternatives to zoos.
>>> Correct.
the zoos have to break narrow cages and make huge cages which animals can run and play themselves.
>>> The zoos have to build huge cages where animals can run and play freely.
And we should watch them far away so that they don\'t get stress.
>>> Moreover, people should just watch them from afar so that they don\'t get stressed.
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