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It is one of the best "goose bump moment" I've ever seen. He immediately signed to a record deal with Simon, one of the judges of the show and he became a very famous singer. It is not a story in some fairly tales. And I think that is why we are so moved by the guy. He has tried and tried, and finally fulfilled his lifelong dream. Seeing his achievement I would like to appreciate him very much for teaching me to being a persistent person.

[이름], Your composition correction. If there any questions about it, please feel free to raise them in class.Have a great afternoon.   It is one of the best "goose bump moment" I've ever seen. >>It was one of the best, 'goose bump moments? I've ever seen. He immediately signed to a record deal with Simon, one of the judges of the show and he became a very famous singer. >>He immidiatly signed a contract with Simon, on of the show's judge then he became a very famous singer. It is not a story in some fairly tales. >>correct >>It's not a fairy tale. (>>better.)  And I think that is why we are so moved by the guy. >>It's a real story and that is one reason why we were moved by the guy. He has tried and tried, and finally fulfilled his lifelong dream. >>correct Seeing his achievement I would like to appreciate him very much for teaching me to being a persistent person. >> Seeing his achievement; I would like to appreciate him very much for teaching me to become a persistent person.