Amusement Park
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Theme: [ESSAY] >> Why do people go to amusement parks even if they are scared to try the rides or attractions?
I think they want to feel thrilling.
For example, I ride pirate ship ride(In swing)even though I have acrophobia.
It is so fun!(But it\'s scary to...)
And I want to take one more time taking VR roller coaster experience!
Because it was thrilling!
I think people go to amusement parks because they want to feel thrilling!
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Theme: [ESSAY] >> Why do people go to amusement parks even if they are scared to try the rides or attractions?
I think they want to feel thrilling.
>> I think it gives people a thrill when they try the rides so they still ride them even though they feel scared because they want to have that feeling.
For example, I ride pirate ship ride(In swing)even though I have acrophobia.
>> For example, I tried the pirate ship ride (In swing) even though I have an acrophobia.
It is so fun!(But it\'s scary to...)
>> It was so much fun, but it was scary, too.
And I want to take one more time taking VR roller coaster experience!
Because it was thrilling!
>> And I want to ride the VR roller coaster one more time because it was thrilling!
I think people go to amusement parks because they want to feel thrilling!
>> I think people go to amusement parks because they want to feel thrilled!
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