An air purifier next to the Earth

2025-08-25 · 첨삭 강사 Cathy

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I\'m very interested in the invironment. If I make an invent for the world, I will make an air purifier next to the earth. This will improve the air gas suffered by people a lot. And, life in nature,animal,and even humans will be much more comfortable. This because it absorbs yellow dust and fine dust, so people can enjoy a pleasant environment without wearing a mask.

강사 첨삭

Hi Jenny 🌸

Wow! Your idea about making an air purifier next to the Earth is so creative and smart. I can tell you really care about the environment and want to make the world a better place for people, animals, and nature. That’s such a kind and thoughtful dream. 🌍💚

The way you explained it shows that you’re not only smart, but also imaginative. I love how you thought about yellow dust and fine dust, because those really affect our daily lives. Your invention would truly help everyone breathe freely and live more comfortably. That’s a brilliant idea for someone your age!

Keep dreaming big, Jenny. One day, ideas like yours could inspire real inventions that change the world. Never stop being curious and creative, you already think like a future scientist or inventor!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I\'m very interested in the invironment.

>>I\'m very interested in the environment.

If I make an invent for the world, I will make an air purifier next to the earth.

>>If I could invent something for the world, I would create a giant air purifier around the Earth.

This will improve the air gas suffered by people a lot.

>>This would greatly improve the polluted air that people suffer from.

And, life in nature,animal,and even humans will be much more comfortable.

>>Life for nature, animals, and even humans would become much more comfortable.

This because it absorbs yellow dust and fine dust, so people can enjoy a pleasant environment without wearing a mask.

>>This is because it would absorb yellow dust and fine particles, allowing people to enjoy a clean environment without wearing a mask.

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