An elite training system for athletes
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In South Korea, most athletes don't have enough opportunities to have education during their school time since they just focus on sports. It causes many problems. For example, when they got injured so that they have to quit the sports, it is very hard to get into other fields which require other skills. As you can see a lot of examples which prove that is not true, it is not a good way. In the Olympics, many foreign athletes do a great job even though they don't just train the sport for their whole time. Sometimes, they work or study but they are really good at sports.
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Hi [이름]J
I agree that we should give up our schooling for sports and as much as possible, we try to balance education and sports since both of them are important to us.
NicoleJ
In South Korea, most athletes don't have enough opportunities to have education during their school time since they just focus on sports.
>> In South Korea, most athletes don't have enough opportunities to have an education during their school time since they just focus on sports.
It causes many problems.
>>Which could lead to some problems.
For example, when they got injured so that they have to quit the sports, it is very hard to get into other fields which require other skills.
>> For example, when they get injured they have to quit sports and it would be very hard to get into other fields which require skills.
As you can see a lot of examples which prove that is not true, it is not a good way.
>> As you can see, there are a lot of examples that’s not true and turns out not to be in a good way.
In the Olympics, many foreign athletes do a great job even though they don't just train the sport for their whole time.
>> In the Olympics, many foreign athletes did a great job even though they didn’t have a training in their whole life.
Sometimes, they work or study but they are really good at sports.
>> Sometimes, they work or study but they really excel at sports.
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