An increasing number of children are overweight which could result many problem? when they grow olde
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There weren’t many sort of foods about 20 years ago.
>>Correct.
>> OR: There weren\'t many kinds of foods about 20 years ago.
Most of the people who are in their late 40s get used to“the natural food”such a raw food not ready meals in factory.
>>Most people who are in their late 40s get used to the \"Natural food\" such as raw food which is not ready meals in factory.
Now a days the various dishes are getting develop before so that many children can reach any kind of foods including junk food and sophisticated home made food in their childhood.
>>Correct.
>>OR: Nowadays the various dishes are improving so that many children can reach any kind of foods including junk food and sophisticated home made food in their childhood.
The huge difference between before and present is to improve our standard of income and consumption as developing economic environment.
>>The huge difference between before and present is to improve the standard of income and consumption as developing economic environment.
So, many parents and children is suffering from their health and health care costs these days.
>>These days, many parents and children is suffering from their health and health cost.
Even some programs and medicines that making slim and healthy body are very popular to people who admire to get skinny.
>>Correct.
There fore, to solve this problem they have to reduce high calories food and balance the calories among many kind of delicious foods.
>>Therefore, to solve this problem, they must reduce high food calories and balance the calories among many kind of delicious food.
Most of all, exercising regularly is one of important factors to prevent getting overweight.
>>Correct.
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