an unforgettable circus

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T.Trisha

1.My father took me to a circus stage tent when I was just 11years old.

>>>CORRECT!

2.In front of us, there was one family in line to buy tickets.

>>>CORRECT!

>>>OR In front of us, there was a family in line to buy tickets.

3.The head of pack , father and mother seemed to be satisfied with beutiful their eight children.

>>>The heads of the pack, father and mother, seemed to be satisfied with their eight beautiful children.
4.The kids were very polite and admiring their parents in line.

>>>The kids were very polite and they admired their parents in line.

5.Their clothes were clean but didn\'t look like expensive ones.

>>>Their clothes were clean but these didn\'t look like expensive ones.

6.They were jaggering and holding hands in hands by each other.

>>>They were jaggering by each other, hand in hand.

7.The father questioned the ticket price to ticket booth cashier \" For two adults and eight childer.\"

>>>The father asked the ticket booth cashier about the ticket price. \"For two adults and eight children.\"

8.The cashier replied but the father just was quivering without saying.

>>>The cashier replied but the father just quivered.

9.He couldn\'t tell his family that he might not buy for circus and they should go home.

>>>He could not tell his family that he is not able to buy tickets for the circus and that they should go home.
10. After watching this situation, my father dropped his 20$ cash and tapped the shoulder of the father , \" Oh , you dropped this cash from your pocket, It\'s yours.\"

>>>CORRECT!

>>>OR After watching this situation, my father dropped his $20 cash, tapped the father\'s shoulder and said \"Oh, you dropped this cash from your pocket. It\'s yours.\"

11. The father was freightened and say nothing , finally mentioned \" Thank you so much, this would be big gift for our family, I really appreaciate your generosity.\"

>>>The father was freightened and said nothing. He finally said, \"Thank you so much. This would be a big gift for our family. I really appreciate your generosity.\"