Ancesral worship & Denmark

2012-02-29 · 첨삭 강사 Nica

학생이 쓴 원문

The 3000 year old practice of ancestral worship called CHING MING ist still observed by many chinese families in the world.Once a year familes gather to clean and repair the gravesites of ancestors. They also prepares food for worship. It is why they think that even after ancestors passed away, ancestors has still physical needs.As well as, they believe that their ancestors can could a life of alive relatives. Ching ming is celebrated on August every year.Denmark, a little land of five and a quater million people is a pleasant clean penninsular. It is located north of German between North Sea and Baltic and mainly produces ham, cheese and ceramiccs. It is democratic society that is royal lineage that goes back to AD 935. It divides a year into two parts, golen summer and other season that extend from late fall to midspring.

강사 첨삭

Hi Sophia!^^ Thank you for your composition. You did great. Keep it up!^^ I provided you some corrections. Please find time to review it. ^^ Take care!^^ __Teacher Nica__   The 3000 year old practice of ancestral worship called CHING MING ist still observed by many chinese families in the world. >> Correct! Once a year familes gather to clean and repair the gravesites of ancestors. >> Once a year, families gather to clean and repair the graves oftheir ancestors. They also prepares food for worship. >> They also prepare food for worship. It is why they think that even after ancestors passed away, ancestors has still physical needs. >> The reason behid it is they still think that even after their ancestors passed away, they still have physical needs, As well as, they believe that their ancestors can could a life of alive relatives. \\ >> They also believe that their ancestors could have a life with their relatives. Ching ming is celebrated on August every year. >> Ching ming is celebrated every August of the year. Denmark, a little land of five and a quater million people is a pleasant clean penninsular. >> Correct! It is located north of German between North Sea and Baltic and mainly produces ham, cheese and ceramiccs. >> Correct!  It is democratic society that is royal lineage that goes back to AD 935. >> Correct! It divides a year into two parts, golen summer and other season that extend from late fall to midspring. >> The year is divided into two, golden summer and another season that extend from late fall to midspring.

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