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There are many kind of animals of the experiment for human such as rat, rabbit, dog and so on.
>> There are many animals used for experiments such as rats, rabbits, dogs and so on.
The experiments are
very helpful to people’s life, while it is cruel to animals since they do not have freedom and suffer by the tests.
>> The experiments are very helpful to people’s lives, but at the same time, it is cruel to animals since they do not have freedom and they suffer from the tests.
Therefore, some people argue that we should stop these experiment anymore.
>> Therefore, some people argue that we should stop these experiments.
This essay will discuss the two opinions
and I would express my opinion as well.
>> Correct
The people who think human can use animals for the purpose of the better quality of humans’ lives believe that animal
is just one of the sources in the world.
>> The people who think humans can use animals for the betterment of the quality of human life believe that an animal is just a resource in this world.
Therefore, there is no right to animals and so, animals’ emotions and feelings
are not important.
>> Therefore, there are no animal rights and their feelings and emotions are not important.
The people think that if we cannot test by using animals, people do not know the affects or re[이름]ts
of many experiments.
>> These people think that if we cannot conduct tests by using animals, we wouldn\'t be able to come up with re[이름]ts for many experiments.
Moreover, the progression of science will drop off.
>> Moreover, there will be a decline in the progress of science.
However, others think that there is another way which can develop science without using animal experiment.
>> However, others think that there is another way which can develop science without conducting animal experiments.
There
are various cases already that have tested without using animal experiments such as anti-animal experiment
cosmetics.
>> There are already various cases where people conducted successful tests without using animals such as anti-animal experiment cosmetics.
These people believe that animals have their own lives and they have the same right as humans.
>> Correct
In other
word, human have to respect animals’ lives.
>> In other words, humans have to respect animals’ lives.
My opinion is that animals have their thoughts, emotions and feelings but people can decide the death of animals
because I think animals are exist for human.
>> My opinion is that animals have thoughts, emotions and feelings but people can decide when to kill them because I think they exist for humans.
The meaning that they have rights, so we cannot kill them is people
cannot eat meats anymore.
>> If we consider the idea that animals have rights, we cannot kill them anymore and people would have to stop eating meat.
However, I do not agree that we can kill them cruel like no respecting their lives.
>> However, I do not agree that we can kill them in cruel ways with no respect for their lives.
People
should thank to animals who died for human and try to experiment as simple as possible.
>> People should thank animals who die for humans and try to experiment as simply as possible.
In conclusion, I agree that
if people respect the life of animal, we can test animals for human development.
>> In conclusion, I agree that if people respect the life of animals, we can test animals for human development.
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