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Is it morally right to spend a lot of money on pets, rather than helping people in need?
From the earth\'s point of view, Either Human or animals is nothing more than the same creatures. And people make money through putting lots of effort and time. Where to spend the money is totally up to their own. Unless a human is dying because of lack of money in front of them. If there is a person who needs help desperately, it could be changed. But still I think goverments are responsible for that cases through welfare. Not the individual.
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Questions: Is it morally right to spend a lot of money on pets, rather than helping people in need?
Your Answer: From the earth\'s point of view, Either Human or animals is nothing more than the same creatures. And people make money through putting lots of effort and time. Where to spend the money is totally up to their own. Unless a human is dying because of lack of money in front of them. If there is a person who needs help desperately, it could be changed. But still I think goverments are responsible for that cases through welfare. Not the individual.
>> From the earth\'s point of view, human and animals are the same creatures. People make money by putting in lots of effort and in their jobs. Where they spend their money is totally up to them, unless there is a human being who is dying because of lack of money for hospitalization in front of them. If there is a person who needs help desperately, it could be changed. But I think governments are responsible for that cases through welfare, not the individual.
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Great answer! Absolutely agree. :)
See you in a class in a bit!
Cheers!
~Miya^^
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