animals
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I think the reasons are in the hygiene and steriliation process.
Most illegal fercilities are unsanitary.
Defitely concern about infection.
The animals that live in there raised unsanitary living condition.
And the blood of animals and bile etc should need of preserved and sterilization process .
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Hello Ms. [이름]!
It is a regular scenario for illegal facilities to have an unhygienic and unsanitized environment. I guess the best thing to o to avoid this situation is to report people who are operating this illegal activities, Thus, public officials must take action immediately.
Thank you for your response.
Aki~
I think the reasons are in the hygiene and steriliation process.
>>> I think the reasons are in the hygiene and sterilization process.
Most illegal fercilities are unsanitary.
>>> Most illegal facilities are unsanitary.
Defitely concern about infection.
>>> I am definitely concerned about infection.
The animals that live in there raised unsanitary living condition.
>>> The animals that live there are raised in unsanitary living conditions.
And the blood of animals and bile etc should need of preserved and sterilization process .
>>> And the blood of animals and bile, etc should need to go sterilization process.
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