Animals Also Need The Right To Purse Happiness

2020-06-11 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

학생이 쓴 원문

I think animals should also have the right to pursue happiness. All humans are guaranteed their right to pursue happiness by law because it is one of the basic human rights. Some might think that this right is ideal and abstract because of its name; however, we can keep our many rights thanks to this right. For example, residents can require construction workers to stop constructing the building for the sake of keeping residents\' rights to purse happiness by not hearing noises. Therefore, it is a fundamental and realistic right for all humans. By the way, how about animals? Some of them are confined in a small cage making a spectacle of themselves, and others are raised to be eaten. Even though the most important existence is human, we have to protect animals\' right to pursue happiness to a degree as higher animals. Even though we need to eat meat, but we can raise cows and pigs with better treatment. Also, we should not lock animals in the zoo to give them freedom.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Su [이름]!

This is a wonderful composition. ^^
Thank you so much for sending this!


~t. Ally


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I think animals should also have the right to pursue happiness. 
>> CORRECT!

All humans are guaranteed their right to pursue happiness by law because it is one of the basic human rights.
>>  CORRECT!

Some might think that this right is ideal and abstract because of its name; however, we can keep our many rights thanks to this right. 
>> CORRECT!

For example, residents can require construction workers to stop constructing the building for the sake of keeping residents\' rights to purse happiness by not hearing noises. 
>> For example, residents can require construction workers to stop constructing the building for the sake of keeping residents\' rights to pursue happiness by having a silent living space.

Therefore, it is a fundamental and realistic right for all humans. 
>> CORRECT!

By the way, how about animals? 
>> CORRECT!

Some of them are confined in a small cage making a spectacle of themselves, and others are raised to be eaten.
>> CORRECT!

Even though the most important existence is human, we have to protect animals\' right to pursue happiness to a degree as higher animals. 
>> CORRECT!

Even though we need to eat meat, but we can raise cows and pigs with better treatment. 
>> Even though we need to eat meat, we can raise cows and pigs with better treatment. 

Also, we should not lock animals in the zoo to give them freedom.
>> Also, we should not lock animals in the zoo, instead, we should give them freedom.

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