Animals suffering
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If we think about animal suffering, we could most likely to think about polar bear and the melting north pole and iceberg. And the most reason why animals suffer is because of the climate change. For a century (1850s thesis about the climate change), average temperature of whole entire earth has increased about 1 degrees. This change made the environment and the ecosystem ruined. And according to the studies,sea levels increased approximately 15cm. And now 25000 plant species and animals are endangered. Soon, species which will be eliminate and extinct will be about 1million species. The climate change affects the most to animals, and also to human.
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Hello [이름]! You\'re right these days many animals are endangered. Let us hope as years go by more animals will be saved. Have a good day!~~T. James.
If we think about animal suffering, we could most likely to think about polar bear and the melting north pole and iceberg.
>>> If we think about animal suffering, we could most likely think about the polar bears and the melting north pole and iceberg.
And the most reason why animals suffer is because of the climate change.
>>> And the most reason why animals suffer is because of climate change.
For a century (1850s thesis about the climate change), average temperature of whole entire earth has increased about 1 degrees.
>>> For a century (1850s thesis about climate change), the average temperature of the whole entire earth has increased by about 1 degree.
This change made the environment and the ecosystem ruined.
>>> CORRECT
And according to the studies,sea levels increased approximately 15cm.
>>> And according to the studies, sea levels increased by approximately 15cm.
And now 25000 plant species and animals are endangered.
>>> CORRECT
Soon, species which will be eliminate and extinct will be about 1million species.
>>> Soon, species that will be eliminated and extinct will be about 1 million species.
The climate change affects the most to animals, and also to human.
>>> Climate change affects the most to animals, and also to humans.
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