Another homework :^)
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A fantastic job as usual SangHwa!!!
Thanks for making your composition. I really do love your answer. ^^ You are right, art also includes movies, not only drawings and pictures. It is good to have various interests because it keeps things interesting. ^__^ I admit that sometimes I am also a couch potato, a really big one hahaha. Your own answer inspired me to work harder. Anyway, have a happy weekend! Keep safe ^__^
~t.Karen (>.^__^<)
Why hello Karen!
>> Correct! ^^
I guess I\'ve said \"hello\" to you several times.
>> Correct! ^^
Haha anyway today\'s question is \"What inspires you to be better.\"
>> Anyway , today\'s question is , \"What inspired you to be better?\".
>> ** Use a comma [ , ] in your sentence to separate: Introductory words (Anyway) and tittles in quotation marks .
>> ** Use a question mark [ ? ] to end interrogative statements.
>> ** End your sentence with a punctuation mark, in your sentence, it\'s a period [ . ].
>> I\'m very interested in art - especially Klimt (I don\'t know if this spelling is right) , who painted \"The kiss\" and modern art like those made by Pablo Picasso. I also like movies related to psychology, showing their thought by putting fresh new expressions and methods into their films, such as \"Black swan\",\"Inception\",\"Eternal sunshine\" etc.
>> ** It is better to separate your sentences so it will be easier to understand.
>> ** Remove the words \"In the field of \" because it would already be redundant. \"Modern Art\" is understood to be a field or a form of art.
>> ** Add the statement \"Like those made by Pablo Picasso\", because if you don\'t add this, your sentence would mean that Pablo Picasso himself is modern art, not his works.
>> ** Use the conjunction \"If\" in your sentence
(I don\'t know if this spelling is right) to complete the thought of your sentence.
>> Those things inspire me to be better . When I watch them, I think, \"What the hell am I doing? I have to work harder because people have been working hard all the time to produce their own creative art in the world while I\'ve been such a lazy couch potato sitting before the TV.\"
>> ** It is better to separate your sentences so it will be easier to understand.
>> ** It\'s better to say \"Work hard\" because when you say \"Be hard\", you are referring to your body getting physically hard.
>> ** The idiom is actually: \"Couch potato\" not \"Couch potato chip\".
I can\'t be genius like them but at least I can be desiruos in my works and studies.
>> I can\'t be a genius like them , but at least I can be desirous in my works and studies.
>> ** Be careful with your spelling: \"Desirous\".
So watching my favorite art and movie give me inspiration to be harder in my life.
>>
So watching my favorite art and movie gives me inspiration to work harder in life.
>> ** It\'s better to say \"Work hard\" because when you say \"Be hard\", you are referring to your body getting physically hard.
>> ** Check your subject verb agreement. If you have a singular subject your verb should have \"S\" at the end. Example:
a. She workS hard.
b. The man loveS his wife.
Have a nice weekend and see you next week!
>> Correct! ^^
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