another story about a hen
학생이 쓴 원문
My mother- in-law had fed a hen in her garden. Someday, she found that the hen would go out everyday and after a while it came back home. So she thought it strange, but she wasn’t woried about it, because it would regularly come back home. But one day it’d never come back, so she was looking for it around in the neighbor, but useless. So she gave up finding it, thinking it run away or to be killed. Many days were passed since then. She was amazed at seeing that the lost hen was just entering the gate just like a triumphal return, leading a brood of pin feathered chickens. After then the hen was never going out of home taking care of its chick's. How lovely were they! How patient the hen had been!
강사 첨삭
Hi Ms. [Name]!!! Yes this is such a lovely story. The mother hen always take good care of it's chicks and even try to risk their lives to do so. This composition made me remember the story about the hawk and the mother hen. Thank you so much for sharing this. Take care Ms. [Name]. And extend my congratulations to your grandson. See you tomorrow.
Lei J
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