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I think that our society needs stricter displine education for students.
I encourage a displined teacher than a tolerant teacher too much.
Because sometimes a tolerant teacher seems helpness and indifferent.
we need to wake up the sleeping student inside the class and encourage to participate in studying.
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Ms. [이름]!
Good afternoon. Thank you for sharing your ideas about this matter.
Have a great day!
Aki~
I think that our society needs stricter discipline education for students.
>>> CORRECT!
I encourage a disciplined teacher than a tolerant teacher too much.
>>> I encourage teachers to become disciplinarians rather than tolerant of misbehaving students.
Because sometimes a tolerant teacher seems helpless and indifferent.
>>> CORRECT!
We need to wake up the sleeping student inside the class and encourage to participate in studying.
>>> We need to wake the student up who is sleeping inside the classroom and encourage him to participate in studying.
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