Answer 4.

2015-01-06 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I really loke to surf the internet or watch vidos during my free time. Nowdays, I spend my time to watch The Simpsons. You know,the simpson is the most famous television animation serize ever and it has bordcasted since 1989. The 26th season is on air at American Fox channel. I want to learn about convensational English and it's very helpful for me. Also, during vacation, I learn Yoga and pilates from video. It makes my blod line refine softly and stretch. The weather is too cold to exercise outside. So, I practice yoga at my home. Finally, I'm always searching for my hobbies to spend my time efficiently.

강사 첨삭

I love talking about free time^^

Just conversing about it relaxes me *_*

Thanks for this [이름]!

I am looking forward to hear your voice, honey!

I really loke to surf the internet or watch vidos during my free time. 

>>I really love to surf the Internet or watch videos during my free time. 
 Nowdays, I spend my time to watch The Simpsons. 

>> Nowadays, I spend my time watching The Simpsons.

You know,the simpson is the most famous television animation serize ever and it has bordcasted since 1989.

>>You know, The Simpsons is the most famous television animation series ever and it has been broadcasted since 1989.
 The 26th season is on air at American Fox channel.

>>The 26th season is on air in American Fox channel.
 I want to learn about convensational English and it\'s very helpful for me.

>>I want to learn about conversational English and it\'s very helpful for me.
 Also, during vacation, I learn Yoga and pilates from video.

>> Also, during vacation, I learn yoga and Pilates by video.
 It makes my blod line refine softly and stretch.

>> It makes my vein refined and flexible.
 The weather is too cold to exercise outside.

>>CORRECT!
 So, I practice yoga at my home.

>> So, I practice yoga at home.
 Finally, I\'m always searching for my hobbies to spend my time efficiently.

>> Finally, I always search for my hobbies to spend my time efficiently.



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