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2018-01-08 · 첨삭 강사 Amanda

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8. Describe the things that you do together with your brother and/or sister. How often do you spend time together? We rarely spend time with my brothers because we are living apart from each other. but we meet twice a year in New Year’s Day and Thanksgiving Day in Busan at my mother’s house. 9. Compare the time you spent with your family when you were young and now that you're grown up. I spent a lot of time with my family when I was young. but now that I am working, It is certain that I have less time to spend with my family than before. but I try to make sure that I allow more time after finishing work for my family. especially I focus on educating children. 10. What was the most memorable vacation that you had with your family? It is the most memorable vacation that my family went to Canada and USA. We really enjoyed amazing time and we experienced many famous tourist attraction. I felt the importance of the oversea’s travel that could give a motivation and new experience to my children.

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  Hi [이름]ki, 


How are you? I apologize for being absent last Friday.  I made several corrections on your answers. We\'ll review it later tonight.

Thank you.

Amanda ^-^ 



1. Do you like travelling?
Yes, I do. I like travelling. but I don\'t have many experiences to travel overseas. When my son was childhood. my family travel a lot in domestic especially Kangwon province that is famous for winter sports

>> Yes, I do. I like travelling, but I don\'t have many experiences when it comes to traveling overseas. When my son was a child, my family did a lot of domestic travels, especially in Kangwon province which is famous for winter sports.

 2. Do you like to travel alone or with your friends?
It depends on the situation. most of the time I prefer travelling with my family. My wife and I can get a break and my children can experience new things through travel. sometimes I feel travelling alone when I have something to think about.

>> It depends on the situation, most of the time I prefer travelling with my family. My wife and I can get a break and my children can experience new things through travel. Sometimes, I feel like travelling alone when I have something to think about. 

 3. Have you travelled to other places? Where are they?
My family went to Canada and USA two years ago. We stayed at a friend’s house of Vancouver in Canada. and we travelled to the west of USA by using a travel agency for seven days. at that time travel to Disney Land, Universal Studio. Las Vegas etc. After returning to Canada, We travelled to Rocky mountains. during almost one month travel, We experience many things and enjoyed the precious time.

>> My family went to Canada and the USA two years ago. We stayed at a friend’s house in Vancouver, Canada, then we travelled to the western part of the USA by using a travel agency for seven days. At that time, we went to Disney Land, the Universal Studio, Las Vegas, etc. After returning to Canada, we travelled to the Rocky mountains. During our almost one month travel, we experienced many things and enjoyed the precious time.


8. Describe the things that you do together with your brother and/or sister. How often do you spend time together?

We rarely spend time with my brothers because we are living apart from each other. but we meet twice a year in New Year’s Day and Thanksgiving Day in Busan at my mother’s house.

>> We rarely spend time with my brothers because we are living apart from each other, but we meet twice a year on New Year’s Day and Thanksgiving Day in Busan at my mother’s house.


 9. Compare the time you spent with your family when you were young and now that you\'re grown up.

I spent a lot of time with my family when I was young. but now that I am working, It is certain that I have less time to spend with my family than before. but I try to make sure that I allow more time after finishing work for my family. especially I focus on educating children.
>> I spent a lot of time with my family when I was young, but now that I am working, I have less time to spend with my them. However, I try to spend more time with my family after finishing work. I especially focus on educating my children.


10. What was the most memorable vacation that you had with your family?

It is the most memorable vacation that my family went to Canada and USA. We really enjoyed amazing time and we experienced many famous tourist attraction. I felt the importance of the oversea’s travel that could give a motivation and new experience to my children.

>> The most memorable vacation I had with my family was when we travelled to Canada and the USA. We really had an amazing time and we\'ve seen and enjoyed many famous tourist attractions. I felt the importance of the overseas travel that could give a motivation and new experience for my children.



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