Answer 9.

2015-01-13 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I have never been to Europe. So, the next time that I travel and if I have a lot of money, I would like to travel aroung Euro countries with my mom who never went to go abroad. I especially like to visit Paris and Rome. Those cities have a long history and mix with both traditional and modern culture. Whenever my mom and I watch beautiful scene of those cities on television, we always wish to travel there. Also, my mom expects me to use English with foreigners as she couldn't have a culture have a chance seeing which I speak in English. It makes her delighted and she will be very proud of me. Therefore, I hope to travel abroad with mother.

강사 첨삭

Traveling has always been in my to-do list every year!

It broadens our horizons, and reforms our perspectives!

I am hoping to travel around Korea and be with you one of these days, [이름]~

I have never been to Europe.
>>CORRECT!
So, the next time that I travel and if I have a lot of money, I would like to travel aroung Euro countries with my mom who never went to go abroad.
>>So, the next time when I travel and if I have a lot of money, I would like to travel around European countries with my mom who has never gone abroad.
I especially like to visit Paris and Rome.
>>CORRECT!
Those cities have a long history and mix with both traditional and modern culture.
>>Those cities have a long history and mix of both traditional and modern culture.
 Whenever my mom and I watch beautiful scene of those cities on television, we always wish to travel there.
>>CORRECT!
Also, my mom expects me to use English with foreigners as she couldn\'t have a culture have a chance seeing which I speak in English.
>>Also, my mom expects me to use English with foreigners as she couldn\'t have a chance seeing me speak in English.
It makes her delighted and she will be very proud of me.
>>CORRECT!
Therefore, I hope to travel abroad with mother.

>>CORRECT!

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