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Some people argue that protecting old buildings by law is important. But others think it\'s wasting of limited resources. So, this statement is arguable and controversial. In my opinion, conserving old buildings is meaningful and we can get some benefits by doing so. I think in this way for a few reasons.
At first, we can find answer for recent society\'s problem because old buildings keep our ancestor\'s wisdom. For example, the idea of being humble is really important. Kendrick Lamar, the famous black rapper, said, \"Why don\'t you be humble? that\'s the only way to stop the fight between you and me.\" But, in contemporary society, the idea of being humble is disappearing. Then how can we keep that in our mind even in this complicated and busy society. Let me give you answer. In Korea where i was born and live, we still keep old buildings called \'Hanok\'. A door of them is usually low in height. This is because one of the most important things in old Korean culture is \'being humble\'. If you
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Some people argue that protecting old buildings by law is important.
>> Some people argue that the law should protect old buildings.
But others think it\'s wasting of limited resources.
>> However, others think that it is a waste of limited resources.
So, this statement is arguable and controversial.
>> Correct
In my opinion, conserving old buildings is meaningful and we can get some benefits by doing so.
>> Correct
I think in this way for a few reasons.
>> I think this way for a few reasons.
At first, we can find answer for recent society\'s problem because old buildings keep our ancestor\'s wisdom.
At first, we can find answer for recent society\'s problem because old buildings keep our ancestor\'s wisdom.
>> First, we can find answers to the recent society\'s problems from old buildings that keep our ancestors\' words of wisdom.
For example, the idea of being humble is really important.
>> Correct
Kendrick Lamar, the famous black rapper, said, \"Why don\'t you be humble? that\'s the only way to stop the fight between you and me.\"
>> Kendrick Lamar, a famous black rapper, said, \"Why don\'t you be humble? That\'s the only way to stop the fight between you and me.\"
But, in contemporary society, the idea of being humble is disappearing.
>> Correct
Then how can we keep that in our mind even in this complicated and busy society.
>> Then, how can we keep that in our minds amidst this complicated and busy society?
Let me give you answer.
>> Let me give you the answer.
In Korea where i was born and live, we still keep old buildings called \'Hanok\'.
>> In Korea where I was born and where I grew up, we still keep old buildings called \'Hanok\'.
A door of them is usually low in height.
>> These building usually have low doors.
This is because one of the most important things in old Korean culture is \'being humble\'.
>> Correct
If you wanna go through the door, u need to put your head down like vowing.
>> If you want to go through the door, you need to put your head down like you\'re bowing.
This means you put yourself below others.
>> This means that you put yourself in a position that is below others.
By doing so, you can give the signal which means \"I am not arrogant and you are a good person.\"
>> By doing so, you can show that you are not arrogant and that you are a good person.
Because you will pass the door a lot in a day, you can keep the idea in you mind for every moment on the door.
>> Because you will use the door a lot in a day, you can keep the idea in your mind for every moment you walk through the door.
Secondly, old buildings can give historical knowledge.
>> Correct
These days, extensive knowledge can be a valuable asset for the future.
>> Correct
This is because we are often evaluated by the amount of knowledge.
>> This is because we are often evaluated by the amount of knowledge that we possess.
Why do elementary school put stress on a field trip?
>> Why do elementary schools put so much importance on field trips?
Because something can\'t be learned from textbook but from the field.
>> It\'s because there are things that can\'t be learned from textbooks but out on the field.
But if we destroy those old buildings, then how can people learn them?
>> However, how can people learn from these buildings if we destroy them?
For example, What is the main features of japanese old buildings?
>> For example, what are the main features of Japanese old buildings?
small, green carpet, and wood structure.
>> They are small with green carpets and wooden structure.
But can you imagine a perfect scene with this partial information.
>> Can you imagine the exact place with this incomplete information?
But if you watch the buildings, then you just need 3 seconds for understanding what i said.
>> However, if you see the actual building, it would just take 3 seconds for you to understand what I just said.
Furthermore, you may understand how japanese people think or live in the buildings.
>> Furthermore, you may understand how Japanese people think or live from those buildings.
Likewise, It is important to protect old buildings.
>> Likewise, it is important to protect old buildings.
Therefore, i reckon we need to protect the old buildings for learning wisdom from our ancestors and knowledge.
>> Therefore, I reckon that we need to protect the old buildings for acquiring the wisdom and knowledge of our ancestors.
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