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Q6
I think the government will increase the security services, In fact, every government know that they should increase the security services for social stability, but there are some practical problems, such as manpower and budget. so there are some countries in the world that have a good living environment in safety. To add one more thing, It is common sense that the more safe environment the more developing place and gathering people including visitor. If there is any country who want to make money from tourism, he should make all efforts to increase security services in tourist attractions.
>>> I think the government will increase the security services, in fact, every government knows that they should increase the security services for social stability, but there are some practical problems, such as manpower and budget, so there are some countries in the world that do not have a safe or secured environment. In addition, it is common sense that the safer the environment is, the more progressive the place will be.More people will stay including visitors. If there are any countries who want to make money from tourism, they should make all efforts to increase security services to attract tourist.
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Q1
There are many places where I want to go to. Let me introduce some of them to you, They are the Eiffel Tower other in Paris, France, the Colosseum in Rome, Italy, and the London Bridge in London, England. In addition, I have another special place where I someday want to go to. It is Mongol, I have a dream that I could live in the vast Mongol grassland just as Mongolian about for a year. and then I ride horse, breed sheep, and want to enjoy living with nature.
>>> There are many places where I want to go to.(OR: There are many places that I want to visit.) Let me introduce some of them to you. They are the Eiffel Tower in Paris, France; the coliseumin Rome, Italy and the London Bridge in London, England. In addition, there is another special place where I want to go to someday. It is Mongolia. It\'s my dream to live in the vast grassland of Mongolia the way Mongolians do for about a year and then I will ride a horse, breed a sheep, and enjoy living with nature.
Q2
It is a good time to go there for summer or winter vacation for school. Because I want to go with my family, my son and daughter are studying in middle school and elementary school each. And I can choose my vacation in work whenever I want.
>> It is a good time to go there during summer or winter school vacation because I want to go with my family. My son and daughter are studying in middle school and elementary school respectively. And I can choose my vacation from work whenever I want.
Q3
I like to see and experience something new and amazing. because I can learn something that I have never known before from it. so I want to go there whatever and wherever it is. There is no obstacle to go there but money now.
>> I like to see and experience something new and amazing because I can learn something that I have never known before. so I want to go there whatever and wherever it is. There is no obstacle to go there but money now.
Q4
Although the tourism has a little portion of the whole economy and it just affects the insignificant effect in Korea economy. But the reputation of one country could be seriously affected. So tourism is a very important matter, not just economic matter but nation’s position in the all around the world people\'s mind.
>> Although tourism contributes a little portion to the whole country\'s economy, the reputation of one country could be seriously affected. So tourism is a very important matter, not just about economic matters but the nation’s reputation around the world.
Q5
Recently the more and more foreigners visit Korea. That is because the Korea government is paying attention to tourism to develop as a new growth industry. So clean and affordable accommodations and various convenient facilities have been built all over the country for the past few years. Moreover, illegal acts like touting, and overcharging to tourist are more and more decreasing due to an intensive crackdown.
>> Recently, more foreigners are visiting Korea. That is because the Korean government is paying attention to the tourism industry to help economic growth. So clean and affordable accommodations and various convenient facilities have been built all over the country in the past few years. Moreover, illegal acts like touting, and overcharging tourists are decreasing due to an intensive crackdown.
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