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2013-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Aurora

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Please make a creative composition on the "What are some reason why privacy is important for you? Explain why?" My mother got a call that my younger sister had been kidnapped 2 years ago. At that time my sister lived in Seoul alone, so my family was so worried about her, but she was sleeping at her house at that time. I guess the phone number and information of my family was exposed to someone. It could be a crime if privacy were not protected. So I insist there needs to be more powerful laws to keep one's privacy.

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That\'s terrifying indeed. I can\'t believe how some criminals would go to the extent of doing this heartless crimes. But you are right. The privacy of people should be more strictly protected. T. Aurora Please make a creative composition on the \"What are some reason why privacy is important for you? Explain why?\"My mother got a call that my younger sister had been kidnapped 2 years ago. >>Correct! At that time my sister lived in Seoul alone, so my family was so worried about her, but she was sleeping at her house at that time. >>Correct! I guess the phone number and information of my family was exposed to someone. >>Correct!  It could be a crime if privacy were not protected. >>It could be a crime if people\'s privacy was not protected. So I insist there needs to be more powerful laws to keep one\'s privacy. >>So I insist that there should be more powerful laws to keep one\'s privacy.

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