Apart from the obvious reason of winning money, why do people gamble?

2017-04-21 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Personally, there is two reasons why people gamble. First reason is that people expect to win money again and again. Even though peole lose lots of money, they delude themselves. Second reason is that they are addicted by gambling. This is because they can not control themselves. As a result, for these reasons, people do gambling.

강사 첨삭

Hello!

Most people with gambling problems say they lost control over how much time and money they spend gambling. Gambling cause a lot of family problem as you may know so I hope you won\'t ever try it.

~T. Kelly

Personally, there is two reasons why people gamble. 

>> Personally I think there are two reasons why people gamble.
 First reason is that people expect to win money again and again. Even though peole lose lots of money, they delude themselves.

>> The first reason is that people expect to win money again and again even though people lose lots of money, they delude themselves.

OR>> First, people expect to win again and again although in reality they lose a lot of money instead..
 Second reason is that they are addicted by gambling. This is because they can not control themselves.

>> The second reason is that they are addicted to gambling. This is because they cannot control themselves.
 As a result, for these reasons, people do gambling.

>> As a result, people gamble.

OR>> For these reasons, people gamble.

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